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Re: A Night To Behold
A Night to Behold What a night to behold, Watching the city lights glow Like stars and diamonds Sparkling, for the two of us alone. We lie side by side, ...
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Re: Friends
Wow, short but meaningful. I liked it.
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Re: Philophobia
Wow, for a first try, this is really good. I just don't feel the theme right now because I'm kind of heading on the other direction if you know what ...
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Re: Breaking The Mould.
Hey, how's it going? This was enjoyable to read and I think you expressed yourself clearly with this. Just follow the basic sentence pattern, okay? Capitalised letters on the beginning ...
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Re: Catching His Eye
Um, you might want to put some spaces between stanzas because it's a bit hard to read. Other than that, well it was okay as far as the message of ...
Dec 13, 2009 -
Re: Housefly
I've watched you silently, Moving from one place to another. Letting fate dictate your route, Every second of it makes me wonder, How was it able to carry you? Your ...
Dec 13, 2009 -
Re: And We Were
Nice, reminds me of those suicide bombers/jet fighters. Good job. I like it.
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: Aja, Aja
Beautiful, it speaks of the harsh truths of the world. I just don't know what aja means.
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: The Cruelty of the World
The poem is too short and didn't really give out the emotion I think you wanted to convey. It left me hanging because the title really caught my attention.
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: Swimming
Swimming takes courage for when we swim we go to a place where we're not really meant to- the waters. When we go for a dive, we try to store ...
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: 'Kemia
You said this is about anorexia nervousa but somehow this reminds me of a cancer or drugs. Still it was fun to read, nice choice of words and very powerful.
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: Utopia
Mountains of bare flesh, Piled up one after the other A silent slumber From last night's wonders. They had drowned from seas of the holy water, Then buried under their ...
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Re: A Change
Well, everyone has their views about life. Anyway, do you have time? Care to comment on my work?
Dec 10, 2009 -
Re: Hiding The Cracks
This poem reminds me of this quote from Ani Difranco, “Some people wear their smile like a disguise. Those people who smile a lot, watch their eyes. I know because ...
Dec 10, 2009 -
Re: A Change
And the new beginning is death? Well, if it is, I can't say I understand it but well, to each his/her own.
Dec 10, 2009
